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Hello, Father.
Are you happy to see me?
I've been fine.
My wardrobe stays the same, just this orange suit with my bracelets and chains.
My room's not any different, either.
It's empty. There's only a metal bed, sink, and toilet.

How was your day?
I guess they all seem the same from where you are.
Seeing the same sights everyday.
How's Mother?

Mother? There you are, Mother.
Right next to Father, just like I saw you last.
You seem upset. Why?
Are the men behind me bothering you?
Do you not like your neighbors?
What is wrong, Mother?

You say that you cannot forgive me?
You say that you shouldn't have to be here?
You say that you would have treated me better?
Both of you tell the same lies.

I felt on that day more furious than ever.
And I remembered where Father's gun was.
I was just wanting to see how you would like it,
Being hurt and abused all the time.

I think I won.

If only we would have had more time to play, Mother and Father.
I miss you.
My friends back there aren't as fun.
They underestimate me.
They call me weak and harmless.
But I am the exact opposite.

You agree, don't you?

Well, it's time for me to go.
The men back there are telling me to say goodbye.
Your gravestones look nice.
I'll bring more roses next time, Mother.

By the way-

I'm sorry I had to put a bullet through your head,
But I feel much better now.
Maybe next time I'll put a bullet through my own head.
Just to please you.
I've had this idea in my head for about a week and a half.

It's so demented.

It's about this girl who was abused by her parents. She killed her parents at age 12 and is now serving a life sentence in prison. She is absolutely insane and has murdered other people in prison. People constantly have to watch her and make sure she won't harm anyone.
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kermie4201 Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2010
Wow, I wasnt expcting that ending. Great write, I love how you set everything up, the mystery behind the men standing behind the child, concealing the actual deaths of the parents, jut epic.
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kyriewolfluver212 Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much for the comment. It makes me feel good about my writing.

I'm glad that you enjoyed the poem that much. I have heard suggestions from other deviants saying that I should revisit this in about a month or so and continue it.

Again, thank you so much for the comment. It means a lot to me.
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kermie4201 Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2010
I dont feel any need for a continuance, but hey, whatever suits the muse. And please, thank you.
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kyriewolfluver212 Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Okay, thanks for the input, haha.

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Rokkii Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2010
Wow! Ooooh! That's soooo creepy!!! And that it's about a true person! Jeeeez! It's pretty well written! But maybe if you left it a month or so and came back! It could be WOW!!!!!!! Breathtaking, heartstopping, insane!
But it's still good! =) No worries! =)
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kyriewolfluver212 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much for the great comment! I finding good people out here!

I didn't write about a particular girl, but I do believe that there have been murder cases where children have killed their parents. Even adults.

Thank you soooo much for the compliments. I love hearing positive feedback on my creations!

I tried to make her seem as insane as I could. I imagined her as a young child- 11 or 12- and she acts younger. But I also pictured her kind of bipolar. She's the type that could be happily dancing and singing nursery rhymes, then the next second she's out there killing her grandparents (I don't know LOL).

And again, thanks!
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Rokkii Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2010
Haha, wow! That is so amazingly creepy!!!!!!!!!!! It's great! =) Good job!
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kyriewolfluver212 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks!

By the way, I love your gallery! Keep up the great work! The photography is beautiful!
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Rokkii Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2010
Thank you so much! =) That means a lot to me!!!
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kyriewolfluver212 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome!
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